Weird that I haven't watch this before until now but it's pretty good stuff.
It's really not easy to create a drama series esp for flash animation. Alot of planning and efforts needed but I thought you started really well.
There's a few awkward animations here and there but it's fairly acceptable since it is a one man team.
The only improvement I can suggest is probably the content of the episode. Since this is an introduction ep, there are plenty of talking so it might make the ep a little to the dry side. You can either add even more actions or quicken the pacing or shorten the length of the ep. Hopefully you can balance this in the future eps.
I also thought you introduced to many characters and different places in a single ep. I can't really catch all of them yet.
Other than that, the rest are fine, great work from the VAs as usual.
Look forward to the next ep. Hope this develops out well. :)
This is actually pretty good.
Some mentioned the previous ep is better but I haven't watch any previous episodes before, so I can't compare it.
So far i think the major issues are already mentioned. Just work on the pacing especially if you are still using 3D. Currently the pacing is too even, thats why it feels a little slow, you could make some parts faster and some parts slower.
And also the backgrounds looks really plain now, its probably a hassle to model the backgrounds, so for still shorts i think its better to draw in flash.
The characters may look a little generic but still acceptable.
And this episode is also a little short, maybe you could add in the fight at the end.
Overall i think there's a lot of potential and i look forward to future installments. Great job :D
This series actually do have some potential but each submission is too short. Rather than cutting up in scenes you should just keep them in acts or make them longer. I'm sure this will attract more people and keep their interest going as i believe people won't just want to watch an entirely talking scene.
It needs more advancing plot development.
Other than that the drawings are pretty decent.
Just hope you can work on the pacing and the contents in each of the short.
Good luck in future episodes. :)
Full episodes are usually 30 minutes. They're way too long file size wise to put up here and each episode will usually be longer than the 16,000 frame limit. The pacing is actually fine, but seems much slower when it's posted scene by scene.
This episode is different, there's only 3 scenes script wise but will probably cut into more for size restraints.
I put up each entire episode, full format on my site. Watching it together as a single episode is how to properly watch them, but I put them up on NG scene by scene as I finish each one. Script wise the first 3 Acts were relatively slow in terms of action in compared to 4 and up.
I write this as I wrote the novels, so character development is usually shown through the dialogue, etc. But like I said, watching it as a singular episode kinda kills that slow pacing. But I understand how it feels slow since no matter what I say, as long as each scene is posted individually people will take them as single entries. But until I find a way to submit an entire 30 minute episode in one shot it'll have to be done this way. I have some ideas on how to pull it off, but I'm not entirely sure it'll work on NG.
But yeah, this episode is unique in how the first two scenes are short, though the first scene of each episode is usually about the same length before the opening. The 3rd scene itself, considering its content is about 15 minutes on its own.
Hmm, i have no problems with the premium edition thing, its still playable and enjoyable without having to activate it.
Dunno what's the fuss everyone is making. It's not like you must pay in order to play. It's just an add-on thingy for the artist to earn some money. Which you can always choose not to pay.
Anyway, Graphics and sound are really done well.
Great game, kept me playing for hours. :)
Pretty addictive. The characters are soooo cute.
But the ending could be improved. :)
I liked this game alot. Nice graphics and game play, very addictive.
But I'm looking for some upgrades or stuffs like that. So whatever money we earned in the previous stage, we could spent it on other things, for example more stuffs to help out or make the waitress faster.
Also it helps if there's more items to sell, or different items in every stage so we won't get bored by the repetitive items.
Awesome dubstep. I'm enjoying your music so much.
I'll like to use it for my demoreel, if you are ok with it.
If there's a chance, I'll like to work on a collab with you, or animate one of your tracks.
Keep making these!
Yeah dude, You can use my music in whatever you want just make sure to put the title of the track in the description along with the download link.
A pretty nice loop, liked it very much. Will sound nice in the game definitely :)
I'm sure it will.
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